iss Snark’s formula for a hook goes like this:
X is the main guy;
Y is the bad guy;
they meet at Z and all L breaks loose.
If they don’t solve Q, then R starts and if they do it’s Lsquared.
But this only seems to work for romance novels where one character starts off being the bad guy. (There are some good examples of this. E.g., “Miss Challoner wants to save her younger sister from the seductive Marquess of Vidal, who threatens her virtue. But when he kidnaps her instead, he decides that she’ll do just as well.”).
But how the devil do you write, say, “An Offer from a Gentleman” by JQ?
You could write it in hook form: “Sophie Beckett’s stepmother lied and cheated her out of her inheritance. They meet when Sophie is 10 years old. 70% of this novel ignores the stepmother, the true antagonist, and focuses on Sophie’s relationship with Benedict Bridgerton. Oops.”
Or, how would you write a hook for “Potent Pleasures” by Eloisa?
“Charlotte was deflowered by an anonymous gentleman years ago. Now we need an antagonist. Alex, who’s actually the hero, is occasionally a complete ass. When they meet, he isn’t a complete ass at first. But then he becomes one. If he doesn’t learn not to be a complete ass, then … well, then Charlotte’s husband will be a complete ass. But if he does, then he won’t.”
So what’s the form for a romance hook? If I’m coming up blank staring at her hook form, is it because I’m trying to pound a square peg into a round hole?









December 22nd, 2006 at 1:06 pm
She doesn’t represent romance, hence the oversimplification of what a hook is supposed to be.
In my opinion, a romance hook needs to include thumbnails of the hero and heroine, why they’re brought together, what’s keeping them apart (emotionally and/or physically), and why we should care.
December 22nd, 2006 at 9:34 pm
How about this:
H is the heroine.
A is the hero (or B, if he’s beta)
They are drawn together by C, and then they have X.
Really great X.
But when Y threatens to tear them apart, they have to solve Z.
Then all L(-U-V) breaks loose.
December 24th, 2006 at 11:48 am
LOL - Yeah, I think Tessa’s got it!
Miss Snark’s formula (taken broadly) is all about setting up the major conflict, so if you read “bad guy” as main opposition or person in conflict with X. So the hero & heroine would always be X and Y and any “bad guy” is really just incidental (or fits at point Q, depending on your plot). So AOFAG might be something like “Sophie is illegitimate and her evil stepmother won’t let her forget it. Benedict is from one of the oldest and best families of the ton…” and so on.
Amusing that everyone’s getting slammed for not using the formula - when she didn’t reveal it until after the submission period was closed.
December 24th, 2006 at 11:48 am
omg - I can actually post comments now!
December 30th, 2006 at 1:19 am
And/or try it this way. Love is the hero. Whatever is preventing love is the bad guy.
So the hero and heroine what love, but can’t have it because X.. um, or was that no X….?
Alice