Swept away
Posted by CM under Legalese on Mon 5 Mar 2007
really thought I knew the basics of how Book 2 was going to work. I had an idea of what happened first, what happened next, the two climactic points in the book. I knew what the heroine was like, and the hero had a minor, but rather important role in Book 1, and so I knew him too.
But I felt like I should start a little before I went through the major planned revision pass on Book 1–the one that will tie up all the loose little ends, and finish a few of the quieter chapters. Because if I needed to make any drastic changes, I’d like to know now rather than later.
Good thing I did that, because Book 2 as I’d envisioned it just wouldn’t work. Chapter one wouldn’t write, so I figured I’d write one of the scenes I imagined leading up to the Black Moment. And I did. And . . . I got the thumbs down from the critique partner, and we talked and I figured out that the hero was just not going to work in this story. I could change him a little bit, but not a lot. He had too much in common with the heroine, and he’d never be able to make her realize that she was just a little spoiled. Which she is. Because the hero was just a little spoiled, too.
Sir Barely-Appearing-in-Book One then stepped in. I knew nothing about him when I started writing the first chapter (except that in the original version of Book One, he was married–oops–not anymore!). I just knew what he was going to do. And he was just brilliant at it. He was so brilliant that I knew what he was going to do next, and so my heroine showed up at his office–yep, this one’s not a lord, either–and offered to hire him. She was supposed to hire him. It would have thrown them together for chapters and chapters. Except . . . .
Except he absolutely refused to go along, the damned stubborn man. He fought me every step of the way, insisting at every turn on his independent and pride. Every word she spoke rankled him, as it must have done. And so he tossed her out of his office. It was . . . so right.
In any event, Oliver has taken locution lessons, and can usually pass as a gentleman. But he’s from Leicester–a city I chose because Richard Armitage is from Leicester, and he claims to have used his native accent in “North and South,” and so I shall have to remind myself of what it sounds like by listening to him speak over and over again (grin)–and it creeps out from time to time. While trying to figure out how to describe the speech, I came across this incredible site:
(Whoops: Here it is: http://www.bbc.co.uk/voices/)
These recordings are obviously modern, but they’ll give you an idea of rhythm, cadences, vowel sounds. It’s absolutely stunning in scope. For the most part, if your characters are members of the ton, they’ll be talking the “proper” English that we all know and recognize. But if you need a little color, this is a great place to start. Certainly better than dialect websites that classify isoglosses and nurse/square mergers, none of which your characters will think about in speech.









March 5th, 2007 at 5:43 pm
Before I started the current WIP, I kept trying to work on another with a plot similar to what you are describing… only mine didn’t work. It all actually started with a title I came up with - A Gentleman For Hire - but the story never came with it. Granted, the acronym is a little iffy - AGFH - but I still think there’s a certain ring to it. Gah, I wish writing were as easy as coming up with titles!
March 6th, 2007 at 1:14 am
Er, what was that site? My Scottish and Irish brogues are starting to sound identical…
March 6th, 2007 at 1:41 am
Oops: The site is here.
March 6th, 2007 at 9:46 am
Wonderful site! Thank you CM. And your second book sounds like it’s going to be excellent. I’d love to read it.
Alice
March 6th, 2007 at 9:50 am
Oh, what a chore - listening to RA for research. I may need to create a character from Leicester, too!
Somewhere on the Internet there are clips of his voiceover work for commercials and such, too.
You know, I once heard a speaker say something like, “When your characters get out of line, you should pull them back in - you are God in your story.” I’ve since decided that person was dead wrong. First off, in my little liberal Protestant Bible school, we got taught that God gives his creations free will. Second, when those characters get out of line, it’s not “them” against “you” - it’s your own better judgment speaking up. The best things in my book happened when characters developed “minds of their own.”
and Sir Now-Starring-In-His-Own-Book is hot!
March 6th, 2007 at 11:36 am
Well, the voice clips might be nice. But the video clips are good, too, because that way I can observe him. You know, see if there are any facial expressions from the region and all. All in the name of research.
I may have to replay some of those video clips multiple times.
March 6th, 2007 at 1:24 pm
Wow, saved us a bit of research! Thanks CM!
Also, don’t you just love it when your characters won’t cooperate!
March 6th, 2007 at 3:25 pm
Pam, I do love it.
The best lines I’ve gotten have been from uncooperative characters. Oliver is . . . uncooperative to a high degree. He doesn’t cooperate with me. He doesn’t cooperate with the heroine. He just doesn’t. And he’s so bloody good when he doesn’t cooperate–although he’d never say that, because he doesn’t swear–that it’s all worthwhile, even though I can feel the tentative idea I had for a plot leaking out the sides.
March 6th, 2007 at 10:45 pm
Nothing better than watching and listening Richard Armitage read a series of children’s stories, and at the end, saying, “Now, it’s time for you to go to bed. Night! Night!”
And then there’s the clips of him laughing during a read-through of Vicar of Dibley scripts . . .
. . . his interviews to pitch his Guy of Gisborne in Robin Hood . .
hmm . . . and so much more to listen and watch! I really love his audion Robin Hood books. Makes the drives in the van very inspiring!
March 9th, 2007 at 12:13 pm
Bookmarking this for later. Thanks!